Three tanka

A tiny spider
has spun its web across
the lens of my camera.
I check the memory stick
for pictures of flies.

*

Slender bodies,
legs impossibly long,
translucent wings:
stranger than any daydream,
the crane flies float through the trees.

*

On the damp woods trail
my boots scarcely make a sound.
Squirrels keep throwing fits —
as startled as me, this July morning,
by the apparition of my breath.

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  1. First, LOL;
    Second, planar like a painting;
    Third, explosive with contrast and surprise,
    the favorite; the space from ground to tree top crisscrossed with sound and gas; two points of view. “Apparition” is great, a slide between “appear” and a plosive exhalation, a cloud puffed with puh sounds.

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  2. I really like these. Very nice little snapshots. Tanka is a form I’ll have to study more. :)

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  3. I love these, Dave! All three talk about favorite subjects, and wonderfully. I particularly like the first. Clever (in a good way.)

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  4. Thanks for the comments. I agree, the first one is the strongest.

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  5. I like them all, especially together. I haven’t tried this form.

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