Blue Jeans (magnetic poem)

Posted by Dave Bonta on June 21, 2008 (last modified at 1:41 pm, 6/21/08)

magnetic poem
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Working with severe restrictions made me think of… working with severe restrictions.

Via Shuffle Words, and prompted by a comment from Marja-Leena. Shuffle Words lets you save and link to your work, so feel free to leave links to your own magnetic poems in the comments.

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6 Responses to Blue Jeans (magnetic poem)

  1. Dana says:
    June 21, 2008 at 7:37 pm

    This is a fantastic poem. I like the absurdity but it also makes sense, if that makes any sense. I am really impressed. This (almost) makes me want to write poems again.

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  2. Dave says:
    June 22, 2008 at 8:41 am

    Dana – Your comment just saved this post. I woke up this morning thinking that I really ought to take it down, because it just wasn’t up to my (fairly minimal) standards for poetry here. But since you like it, I’ll leave it up.

    A break from poetry might be a good idea for you if it means you keep blogging your memoirs. But there’s a lot to be said for writing poems even when one doesn’t feel like it, I find.

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  3. christine says:
    June 25, 2008 at 12:22 pm

    How our clothes travel, and our words too! A creative way to sift for meaning, like catching words from your mind with a butterfly net. I’m looking forward to trying this. i love the semi-random nature of the process, the game of it, the play.

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  4. Dave says:
    June 25, 2008 at 1:20 pm

    It is fun. My only criticism of Shuffle Words is that they don’t provide any alternatives to the particular choice of words there now. So I can imagine getting rather tired of it after a few times.

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  5. one more believer says:
    July 1, 2008 at 6:13 pm

    came over by way of WRP who had a link to your post for their latest prompt… have been to shuffleboard but never partook… really like the way it turned out… last line is perfect…

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  6. Dave says:
    July 1, 2008 at 9:33 pm

    Hey, thanks.

    Reply

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