Comments on: Reception

By: Dave

Dave — Sat, 26 Sep 2009 23:49:22 +0000

Indeed it is.

By: Dave

Dave — Sat, 26 Sep 2009 23:49:03 +0000

I had to look up enso, which I should know: a calligraphic circle in Zen Buddhism. Thanks for being such an astute reader.

By: Dave

Dave — Sat, 26 Sep 2009 23:45:17 +0000

I didn’t think of “bowel” as a possible undertone… but as a disciple of Rabelais, I’m all for it! Thanks as always for the critique.

By: Peter

Peter — Sat, 26 Sep 2009 05:32:23 +0000

This is the kind of comment that helps me see a poem in a new way. Beautiful, Laura.

By: Laura Sorrells

Laura Sorrells — Sat, 26 Sep 2009 03:26:20 +0000

Gorgeous indeed. I love the cracked moon, the watery shiver. A lonesome enso of a poem. There’s an interesting almost-loop that really makes that metaphor work for me, there at the end of the poem. The way the copse feeds the wood and then the one good bowl almost feels like a circle but not quite. thanks.

By: Therese Broderick

Therese Broderick — Wed, 23 Sep 2009 13:23:41 +0000

Following on Peter’s comment — The eye rhyme of “bowl” with “howl” amplifies the undertone of “bowel;” and the vowel of “copse” puts pressure on the last vowel of the poem, again reverberating with “bowel.” Bowels as another kind of receptacle for feed and sound. A poem for the autumn equinox: equal spellings for different sounds received by the ear and guts.

By: Dave

Dave — Wed, 23 Sep 2009 11:42:11 +0000

Thanks, Peter! I only thought of the “glass palace” line at the last minute, but now that you mention it, it does feel like a solid insight.

By: Peter

Peter — Wed, 23 Sep 2009 03:01:25 +0000

This one is so fun to say and say.

I love that first line. I love how bowl hides howl’s owl, makes it ole. Great tug there.

“In every glass a palace”: unforgettable.

By: Dave

Dave — Tue, 22 Sep 2009 20:18:00 +0000

Thanks, Deb and Rachel!

By: Deb

Deb — Tue, 22 Sep 2009 14:27:52 +0000

Yes. It is.