Comments on: Connected

By: Dave

Dave — Tue, 19 Jun 2007 16:05:23 +0000

Thanks for commenting, y'all. I don't know how obvious the irony was here. But the fact is, at the moment, I am very disconnected, having lost my internet access!

By: maria

maria — Tue, 19 Jun 2007 05:38:30 +0000

What everyone else said so far…. The image of a noteworthy breath was irrupting!

By: marja-leena

marja-leena — Tue, 19 Jun 2007 04:50:15 +0000

Great poem! I wonder if your inner self is substituting the trip around your rooms for that real trip you decided against. ‘Irruption’ is a neat new word to me.

By: Dick

Dick — Mon, 18 Jun 2007 12:45:18 +0000

A fine poem, Dave. I particularly like ‘alert for any irruption
of significance into the hum-
drumming of home appliances’. From adjective into verb.

By: Lucy

Lucy — Mon, 18 Jun 2007 05:13:57 +0000

‘I’ve turned into a tourist
In my own life’.

Hmm, worryingly near the mark…

By: Peter

Peter — Mon, 18 Jun 2007 04:49:27 +0000

Looks like I’m trading the vacation pics I was expecting here for good poetry. Poetry is the best vacation, anyway.

By: leslee

leslee — Mon, 18 Jun 2007 01:20:50 +0000

Sounds like you need a trip somewhere Dave.

By: marly

marly — Sun, 17 Jun 2007 23:20:09 +0000

I carry a camera from room
to room, alert for any irruption
of significance into the hum-
drumming of home appliances.
Someday, even my breathing
will seem worthy of note.

Now, I would like to see that photograph of breath, the day it seems worthy of note! To be Bontaesque-at-its-best, it would have to be what I am not expecting, not caught in the cold air or fogging the mirror.

Not even containing an upside-down insect.

What?

By: Nathan

Nathan — Sun, 17 Jun 2007 22:19:36 +0000

Tall Girl is right.

By: Tall Girl

Tall Girl — Sun, 17 Jun 2007 20:19:10 +0000

Oh yes!