Notes on poetic form

One of the most interesting things that Marly Youmans said in our conversation for the Woodrat podcast was that she began using form in poetry as a consequence of writing prose fiction, because she wanted to make her poems as unlike prose as possible. She also said she liked how trying to find words to fit set rhyme schemes and meters pushed poems in unexpected directions. These two statements have forced me to analyze my own approach to poetry a little bit — in particular, why I still prefer nonce forms or free verse, and why I so quickly get bored whenever I try to write in established forms.

Marly’s right: the discipline of adhering to a strict form can enforce more creative responses. In a way, I encounter something like this every day when I try to fit a lyrical observation into 140 or fewer characters for The Morning Porch. On rare occasions when I’ve dabbled with end-rhyming forms, I have been entertained by some of the odd directions in which this can take a poem. But I’ve also been frustrated by the necessity of abandoning other, equally odd and perhaps more fruitful directions because I couldn’t find a rhyme word. The results have tended to leave me with mixed feelings: they are fun to read, for sure, but they also stay somewhat more on the surface than I like.

Of course, one person’s depth is another person’s shallows, and I make no claim to profundity in any absolute sense. But the fact remains that I write poems first and foremost to discover what I am thinking. Writing a poem involves a kind of extremely attentive listening, in which, ideally, every word and every phrase should be questioned: Is this really the optimal way to express the idea taking shape in my mind? And rhythm and sound are absolutely key. Often, I’ll know I need to end a breath with a one- or two-syllable word, but not which one. Quite often, too, the right word is the one with the best assonance and/or alliteration with its predecessors.

This is one of the most pleasurable and surprising — and perhaps also troubling — things about writing, to me: how the best-sounding words and phrases are also those that seem most right. One sees this of course in political and other forms of discourse, as well: how often our supposed search for meaning in fact brings us under “the spell of the sensuous,” to quote philosopher David Abrams’ resonant phrase.

I don’t know if what I write could be considered free verse or not — I’ve never taken a poetry class — but I do know it is anything but undisciplined. I often go out of my way not to include end-rhymes, either rearranging the lines to hide them, or else thinking up other words in their stead. I don’t want my poems to be song-like and melodic; I want them to sound more like the 20th-century classical music I grew up with, with relatively few repeating figures and lots of pleasing dissonances. I’m not saying I always achieve this, of course, but it’s what I strive for:


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Pantoum, with Spiderweb and Raindrops

This entry is part 47 of 93 in the series Morning Porch Poems: Summer 2011

Still, how beautiful and perfect
each raindrop looks— pearls strung
in that radial pattern, artful across
the web. Easy enough to think

each raindrop a pearl, a rhinestone
broken loose from a silken thread. And
the web’s an easy metaphor, just think.
Someone paces, paints, or writes all night.

Then something loosens: a sigh snaps the threads
that held the shapes, that filled and colored
in the light. Sleepless, write or paint all night:
then revise at dawn; wreck, rewrite. Begin

all over again— what filled those shapes? Color
that beguiled with absolute certainty of itself.
Revising at dawn, amid the wreckage of beginnings,
you find it’s hard to remember how love looked

except beguiling, so absolutely sure of itself.
Think radial patterns, think lines that artfully cross
with all you need, want to, remember. You know how hard to look
at what’s unfinished; proclaim it beautiful or perfect, still.

 

In response to an entry from the Morning Porch.

The life of the body

This entry is part 16 of 20 in the series Highgate Cemetery Poems

cemetery piano

The life of the body never ends—
this is why sensualists
are always so damn cheerful.
It goes on working down there
in that city the soil, busy
as a bodhisattva with 1000 arms
or a leaderless hive of bees.
The life of the body has
its own directive: to reproduce,
yes, but not only in the way
we think. Consider the big-
brained octopus, how its skin
can change in an instant to match
the color & pattern of the background
into which it wants to disappear,
shutting its eyes that do not see
in color, that never sleep.
The life of the body doesn’t end
at our borders. It’s a kind of music
that starts far below the pulse,
reverberating in the vast spaces
on either side of the present moment,
punctuated with every length of rest.

End Times

This entry is part 46 of 93 in the series Morning Porch Poems: Summer 2011

Chicken Mushroom (Laetiporus Sulfureus, L. Cincinnatus)

“It is a common theme [that the United States, which]
only a few years ago was hailed to stride the world
as a colossus with unparalleled power and unmatched appeal
is in decline, ominously facing the prospect
of its final decay….” ~ Giacomo Chiozza in
the Political Science Quarterly

A damp morning: then rain, a fine
mist that stops and starts like
sprinklers in the produce section
at the grocery store. Otherwise an

ordinary day, then neighbors come by
with bags of chicken mushroom;
it glows salmon and orange,
as in the depths of the hollow

from which it was freshly picked.
It looks like something nuclear,
flaunting ruffled shelves that sprout
from wounds of cherry wood, sweet

chestnut, willow, oak, or pine.
In the event of an apocalypse,
if we survive, perhaps we’ll be
reduced to foraging for sustenance

sprung from what might yet live
in rock and rot. Standard & Poor
has just announced it’s down-
graded America’s credit rating;

but at the clubhouse next door,
a group of swimsuit-clad preteens
is waving Wii wands and lollipops,
mimicking moves that would make

Zeus blush. In malls, the muzak
pours like water on an endless
looping track. The Wii party girls
drop their damp towels on the floor.

In Moscow, an “Independence Day” formation
has been spotted in the air; and a Canadian
cameraman has filmed an ominous bank of clouds,
moving across the fields with the face of a Roman god.

 

In response to an entry from the Morning Porch.

Let’s Call the Whole Thing Off

Where you see a vine, I see the flight path of a pair of leaves.

Where you hear pizzicato violins, I hear all the angels of time whispering stop.

Where you pause for breath, I swallow audibly.

Where you exercise one or more rights, I give love a bad name: to wit, You.

Where you invest in gold, I save water & fingernails.

Where you climb a hill, I let my feet take me home.

Where you descend, I stare into my shoes as if they were mirrors.

Where you read Terms of Service, I read Dream at Your Own Risk.

Where you see the letter A, I see a window pretending to be a door.

Dream Landscape, with Ray-bans and Leyte Landing

This entry is part 46 of 93 in the series Morning Porch Poems: Summer 2011

In my last dream before waking,
I couldn’t find
the exit from a mall.

It could have been the Mall
of Asia
(though I’ve never been there),

for the row of glass windows
all along one side
looked upon the bay, and a vintage

biplane overhead trailed a red and
orange banner
through the gloom, reading

“Manila Bay’s Famous Sunset.”
Not a star
perforated the leaden

skies, and a group of schoolboys
down by the wharf
were digging with spoons in the sand.

Or could it have been
a museum?
Now I am confused—

No, now I’m pretty sure it was the mall
next to the museum
named after the five-star General

sporting Ray-bans— because of the frozen
displays of mannequins
dressed in cheap fabrics stitched mostly

in Chinese factories. They stretched
their arms toward the cabinet
holding MacArthur’s silverware and

pewter, but his man-servant wouldn’t
let them near.
“I’m keeping these safe till he returns,”

he declared, perhaps not knowing
that in the lobby
of the rotonda, the man himself

lay sleeping next to his second wife,
a southern belle.
She was 46 and he 64 when he strode

waist-deep into the surf in the famous
Leyte Landing.
I’ve seen a mural commemorating

the event (his wife isn’t in it,
of course), and I have
always wondered but never remember

to ask museum guides why there, behind
the General, Romulo (5’4″)
isn’t up to his shoulders in the water.

 

In response to an entry from the Morning Porch.

Ghost poems

If you read this blog via RSS or email, don’t miss the comment thread to yesterday’s poem about ghosts. Luisa Igloria and Dale Favier responded with some ghost poetry of their own, so I put out a call on Facebook and Google+ for more, and as a result we have a growing and varied collection of ghost poems. Feel free to add your own to the mix. If you’re a blogger yourself, you could make it your post of the day and duplicate your poem at your own site.

Thinking about the intersection between this world and the world of the dead really seems to put the imagination into overdrive. It occurs to me that ghost stories have a lot in common with the telling of dreams: they are one kind of narrative where surrealism is not only tolerated but actively welcomed by non-literary folks. For this reason, I think they are excellent Trojan horses for smuggling a bit more poetry into everyday life. Lyric poetry proper, though, can do something a straight narrative generally will not: make us pay close attention to the sound and flavor of our thoughts. What would ghosts be like? What could it mean to be in the world but not of it? And have we modern humans so cut ourselves off from the natural world now that we are closer to the realm of ghosts than to embodied reality?

Landscape, with Construction Worker, Ants, and Gull

This entry is part 45 of 93 in the series Morning Porch Poems: Summer 2011

“I couldn’t have waited. By the time you return
it would have rotted on the vine.” ~ Lucia Perillo

Danger, Peligro, reads the sign by the orange
cones and yellow tape at the street corner,
where a man in a hard hat is now going under
to investigate the contents of the sewer.

Danger, Peligro, chants the ant at the head
of a line trudging through the gutter:
such industry, just to steal a shard of sugar,
bear away grain that gleams on your shoulder

like a chip from a prehistoric glacier.
Is there someone in file waiting to sprint
when the warden isn’t looking, waiting
to unshackle the chains around the ankles?

Smoke from barges heaving by on the river,
smoke from the paper mills smudging the sky.
Stroke on a corner of blue canvas: either a gull,
or a wingspan strung of honey and wax and twine.

 

In response to an entry from the Morning Porch.

If there were such things as ghosts

This entry is part 15 of 20 in the series Highgate Cemetery Poems

Walking obelisk

They would be white & watery
as boiled potatoes.

They would shimmer like the moon in a ditch.

They would have no eyebrows.

They would frequent banks & stock exchanges
instead of cemeteries.

They would step into traffic
like swimmers into a cold mountain lake.

They would be able to murmur
only a single word: Ah.

They would be afraid of the dark.

Song of the Seamstress’s Daughter

This entry is part 44 of 93 in the series Morning Porch Poems: Summer 2011

Seams, running: as callused fingers spurn
invitations from an open window. French

knots and ears of wheat, fleurs-de-lis,
slip knots; blind stitches for the veil

a bride might wear at a wedding. Slant,
uneven, overcast; picked, pricked, tailor-

tacked; featherstitched and darned.
Work on the willow’s whips of tiny

chain-stitched leaves, the peacock’s many
jade and sapphire eyes. Smooth the heated

iron across the sleeves and bodice, but leave
one end untucked. Careful not to spill

the smell of burning plastic on the breeze.

 

In response to an entry from the Morning Porch.