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1. Peter
   6 years ago Permalink

   This one’s amazing, with or without constraints. Love the last couplet. But the “money horse” seems integral — a powerful suggestion, but the rest of the poem stands up to it.

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   1. Dave Bonta
      6 years ago Permalink

      Thanks — I’m glad you thought so. I really sweated over this one. It was Rachel’s suggestion that I make “rose” into a noun and incorporate that. Plus, we were reading about Brynhild’s revenge and death in the Poetic Edda this evening, and I think that’s partially behind the horse and slow hell.

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2. Fire Bird
   6 years ago Permalink

   yeah I really like this one too – reminds me of Tom Waits or someone

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   1. Dave Bonta
      6 years ago Permalink

      I’ll take that! I love Tom Waits.

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