Hey, I’m glad that worked for you. I had my doubts after the first draft (or whatever the equivalent term is for filmmaking), but I slept on it, and this morning it still seemed O.K. It’s tempting to try another version with just forest footage, but then one might expect a a more literal soundtrack with saw-whet owl calls, a trout splash, etc., and excessive literalism makes for boring videopoetry, I find.

The two main things I learned from your reading was that this poem might also be a statement about poetics (isn’t it odd how authors often have the poorest idea of what their poems are about?) and that long pauses can not only create space, but can help focus the reader’s attention — especially in a poem that has so much to do with listening.