Thank you, Jean – and everybody else who commented on this poem. I’ve been thinking a lot lately about how blogging has changed my poetry practice. I used to polish incessantly, obsessively. Now I typically write poems in a few hours, post them, and move on — and I tend to share the feeling that imperfection is desirable in and of itself (the poem kind of hints at that, too, doesn’t it?). This one was unusual in that I wrote a first draft three days before posting. It probably wouldn’t kill me to sit on first drafts a little longer!
Jean, I also appreciate your point about an audio recording pinning a poem down. I might quote you in a couple of months when I do a follow-up piece on poetry out loud for RWP.