I posted the one I wrote here, and probably will only keep it up a few days. Besides being a mermaid/fisherman story, I draw on the Psyche/Eros myth.

Dave, I don’t find the use of ancient myths automatically leads to “tired.” Rather, they add richness to the underlying construction of a story – there are cultural roots to this perception going way back.

But I do find a tired and conventional trope of the artist and his muse, the hero and his winsome wild women sirens here that I didn’t enjoy.

Since it’s all very self conscious on your part, playing with these conventions, I think you could turn this story from an interesting take to something pushing the envelope of the conventional view… something along the line of taking off those tired, overworn, shall I dare say ‘sexist,’ views perhaps with the removal of his wetsuit. It doesn’t have to be any more than that – simply suggested. And/or something from “her” point of view… would cause the conventional storyline to go askew.

The narrator doesn’t seem the least troubled by the eugenics that created the object of his desire…

There are ways of subtly suggesting that he is cognisant.

Without a hint of an underlying shift in perception, the deeper aspect of this story may go unnoticed. Had I read it, for instance, without knowing it was you who wrote it, I would have thought, it’s well written, but too bad the author can’t see what attitudes he’s continuing to propogate, and dismissed it. But you did write it and so I know better…

Perhaps you could do something with, say, a removal of the wetsuit, that echoes a removal of conventional tropes, attitudes, 2 or 3 thousand years of tired myth, but sutbtly, yet with enough of a ‘periscope’ for a reader like me to see it, and appreciate the shift in our collective awarenesses of our ways of perceiving each other erotically and in our art, creatively…

This, just a suggestion, nothing more. The story is emminently publishable as it is and you should send it out.