Perhaps it’s just too well done, then. I didn’t get the underlying irony through two reads before deciding whether to comment or not – perhaps I’m a bit thick, though. I like the passion of your last comment a lot, and wonder if there’s a subtle way you can work that back into the story for the thick-headed like me? Leaving an authorial perspective (versus the narrator’s perspective in the story) in your comment stream, does serve the same purpose…

(btw, the continuation of this comment thread isn’t showing up in my blogline subs…)